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There is growing evidence that man-made activities are making global temperatures higher. What might be the man-made causes of temperatures rising? How should we deal with this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Industrialisation and technological advancement are man-made activities that have significantly contributed to
climate
change
 globally. The human factors responsible for
this
 as well as the likely solutions will be discussed in
this
 essay .
To begin
 with, industrialisation and technological advancement are the key factors influencing
temperature
 rise globally. The advancing use of technological devices in industries to make work easier for labourers as well as to reduce the manpower needed to perform activities are the reason behind the
climate
change
 witnessed globally in recent years. These technical devices make use of fossil fuels which are released as
waste
 products into the air in form of smoke . The
waste
 , majorly contain carbon monoxide which alters the climatic condition resulting in a rise in
temperature
.
For example
 , in the steel manufacturing industries in Nigeria, the machine used to melt metals uses diesel and it releases thick flames into the sky , it was reported that the cities where the industry is located record high temperatures compared to other cities.
Next
, the solution to the
climate
change
 challenge can be either to manufacture machinery which uses electricity rather than fossil fuels or to utilize alternative
waste
 disposal methods. Electric types of machinery will not release chemical by-product that alters
climate
 conditions making them effective in achieving the goal of making work easier for labourers while preventing
temperature
 rise. Alternative disposal of
waste
 products into underground channels or conversion into less harmful products can
also
 contribute positively to solving the
climate
change
 challenge seen worldwide. In conclusion, industrialisation and technological advancement are man-made activities that have led to an increase in
temperature
 in most burgeoning cities while the likely solutions include changing the source of power to electricity or using alternative methods of
disposing
Add the preposition
ofdisposing
show examples
 the
waste
.

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