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Universities and colleges are now offering qualifications through distance learning from the internet rather than teachers in classrooms. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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Online learning has been taken as to substitute for traditional teaching by many educational institutions after the Covid pandemic. While there are some drawbacks, I still believe
students
 can gain more benefits from distance learning. There are three main advantages
students
 can receive from learning via the internet. The most important one is that online learning is time-saving and provides
students
 more flexibility in terms of time. Especially for people who already have a full-time job, or are under the pressure of a
second
 degree, they can choose whenever and wherever to study since all the courses are pre-recorded, and
also
 they do not need to spend time on transportation anymore.
Also
,
students
 can have more options when applying to school, and the choices are limited back in the traditional degree time.
For example
,
students
 from developing and undeveloped countries can receive knowledge from world-class universities and professors.
In addition
, tuition fees will be more affordable for
students
 since these schools don't need to pay the rental fee, facilities fee and other different expenses.
However
, there are a few disadvantages to online education. One drawback is that
students
 will have less chance to communicate with their classmates and professors.
This
 will lead to a lack of both communication skills and teamwork skills. Another one is that compared with the traditional physically attending class, the interesting internet may distract
students
 who are not well self-controlled.
For example
, some game summer sale advertisements may pop up during the course,
students
 might be attracted by them and press the pause button since they are not under the supervision of teachers. In conclusion,
although
 drawbacks exist, attending online school can benefit
students
 more.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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