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In the future, it may be necessary for us to live on another planet. For this reason, some people believe that we should spend money now researching planets that could be a possible home, such as Mars. To what extent to you agree or disagree?

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Searching for another place to live rather than the
earth
 and spending
money
 for
this
, became a necessity for some people believe. Regardless of what is behind their belief, I believe that spending fund on another unclearly known
planet
 is not a suitable idea, because it cost a lot of
money
 and there is no evidence that these planets are habitable, as well as the
earth
 is a
planet
 where we live and we have to spend more
money
 to make it more comfortable to human beings
instead
 of searching for another
planet
. Looking for another
planet
 has living properties that resemble what on the
earth
 become a dream since humans explored space. By sending spacecraft and releasing space probs that travel through the space collecting scientific data, which might discover any elements of life. The price of these trips
cost
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 billions, and it is quietly useful in terms of improvement of our life on the
earth
, not to be directed toward finding another
planet
 to move onto. To date,
for instance
, no proof of past or present life has been found on Mars,
although
 the surface environment of Mars had water. From another point of view, only our
planet
, the
earth
, needs to be concerned about. Spending
money
 to tackle climate change and other environmental problems by replacing fossil fuels with green energy. As well as, spending on medical services and education which has an immediate impact on the quality of people’s lives. In conclusion, preserving the
earth
 and spending more
money
 to make it much healthy is better than spending
money
 on searching for another unknown
planet
 to live on.
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