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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

#countries #people #history #house #research
Houses
 are
the
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place
that
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where
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people
 live which is meaningful for them. Some
of
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the
people
 take
interest
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an interest
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 on realize the story or history of the
houses
 where
people
 live in. In my opinion, there are some reasons for
people
 to figure out the history of their home with some methods. Most
of
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the human
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human
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 have a sense of belonging of where they
from
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are from
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 or where they begin. Similar to
people
 learning
history
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the history
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 of
hometown
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their hometown
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 or country,
people
 are curious about everything close to them.
Due to
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houses
are
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being
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 the
place
that
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where
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people
start up
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 and come from, so
people
willing
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 to
spent
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 time on
understand
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 the detail of their
home
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homes
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. To be more specific, it is common to see there were lots of impolite
architect
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are
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building the
house
 with shoddy work and use inferior materials. It actually affected a lot
to
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safety
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the safety
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 of living which is pretty important to notice
about
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. In order to have
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a satisfied
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satisfied
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place
 to live, it is necessary for
people
 to understand
how
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where
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 the building
come
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comes
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 from. To obtain the information
of
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about
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 the
house
 must ask someone who
take
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 part in the manufacture of the
house
 without doubt. While the
house
 was
building
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built
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,
parents
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the parents
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 or
architect
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architects
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 are the
person
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people
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 who make lots of
decision
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decisions
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 and
choice
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choices
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 on the shape or elements of the
house
, no one is clear than they of
this
. If the
house
 where
people
 live
in
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is a symbolic building of the city, it is more
easily
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 to figure out the process and story of the building
form
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from
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 public organization or websites on
internet
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the internet
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.
Houses
 are meaningful for most
of
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people
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the people
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.
People
 are interested in the
place
 that they lived in are normal phenomenon, some basic methods help them to understand the details of the building.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
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