Society is based on rules and laws. It could not function if individuals were free to do whatever they wanted to do. To what extent do you agree or not?

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the norm and legitimacy can not operate when
people
have
freedom
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to do whatever they like in
society
. While
this
phenomenon is valid to some extent, I would consider myself an advocate of
this
idea. Without a shadow of a doubt, there is a wide range of roots to pin down why
society
can not run if
people
do not follow the rule as well as legal. One of them is a law made for man to help
people
’s lives become better, especially avoiding chaos.
Therefore
, regulation plays a paramount significant role in
society
, allowing
people
to operate everything in
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order as well as preventing
people
from negative effects.
For example
, in the pandemic Covid-19
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Vietnam, the authorities brought up
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principles
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that
people
must wear masks when going outside to guarantee their health and
people
need to follow it.
Hence
, if individuals were free to do everything and not based on rules,
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society
could not function. While the reasons for the communication can not run if
people
do work without legal permission are widely acknowledged, the drawback stills linger. Because there is some regulation that leads to negative influences on citizen’s lives as well as
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activities.
For instance
, in Vietnam, there was a time when the suppliers exported goods to China, they had to crawl on roads to be supervised by the offices,
therefore
, it led to the quality of their products
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reduced.
Hence
, the law still has some disadvantages. In conclusion,
although
there are abundant reasons to pin down why
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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