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Should the government pay for the course fees for everyone who wants to study at the university?

#government #course #fees #study #university
Governmental duties
such
 as free
university
education
 are controversial issues. Some say that it is one of the duties of all governments to spend
money
for
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 it because it is a priority for the
society
 and some say that free
education
 should only be provided for beginning to
highschool
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high school
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 students and the
money
 for
university
education
 should be devoted to other critical issues
such
 as healthcare system. In
this
essay
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 I am going to discuss both
sides
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side's
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 opinions and give my own.
In
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one
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 hand some people believe that free
university
education
 for all who are willing
,
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 brings equality and helps
the
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society
 to
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develop
develope
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develop
. They believe that the profit of
this
 investment
overweigh
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 its costs for
society
 and it should be done.
On the other hand
, some say that free
education
 is only necessary
in
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 limited grades. As
society
 faces many problems
such
 as health and environmental issues and
budget
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 is limited, Every dollar
that is
 spent on free
university
education
 means that other priorities are ignored and would run out of
money
 so
this
investments
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 drawbacks, overweigh
it's
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 advantages. I agree that deciding about free
university
education
 is not an easy task and it needs
experts
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experts'
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opinion
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. but
personally
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 I believe that no one should be limited
for
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university
education
 due to lack of
money
. If governments are not able to provide free
university
education
, they should consider aids like loans that could be afforded by students and they can
be pay
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 it back in a
long term
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 period after graduation.
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