some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and academic world. others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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