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In addition to making a profit, businesses also have social responsibilities. I completely agree, since businesses do a lot for society than just making money. EDITED: Businesses have always sought to make a profit but hearing people talk about companies’ social obligations is increasing everyday. I completely agree, since businesses do a lot for society than just making money.

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TOPIC
 6:
In addition
 to making a profit,
businesses
also
 have social responsibilities. I completely agree, since
businesses
 do a lot for
society
 than just making money. EDITED:
Businesses
 have always sought to make a profit but hearing
people
 talk about companies’ social obligations is increasing everyday. I completely agree, since
businesses
 do a lot for
society
 than just making money.
TOPIC
 7: It is true that many
people
 are moving to cities looking for a better
life
 but living in the
city
 has it's own difficulties
such
 as traffic, pollution, crime... In my opinion, the government should try and reduce these problems to make
city
life
 much easier. EDITED: It is true that most
people
 are migrating to cities to look for a better
life
 since they are known as places of opportunities but
city
life
 has it’s own difficulties
such
 as traffic, pollution, crime… In my opinion, the governments should try and reduce these problems to make
city
life
 better for average inhabitants.
TOPIC
 8: It is true that in some countries, many
people
 want to live by themselves at the present time than in the past. In my
view
,
this
 has a more negative
view
 than positive because living alone can cause depression and boredom. EDITED: In recent years, it has become more popular for
people
 to live alone in the developed world than in the past. In my
view
,
this
 trend has a more negative impact than positive because living alone can cause depression and boredom.
TOPIC
 9: It is true that some
people
 believe that university students should
study
 their desired
subjects
while
 others argue that they should only
study
subjects
 that are more beneficial in the upcoming years
such
 as science and technology. I believe that every student should have the right to
study
subjects
 they enjoy. EDITED:
People
 have different views about how much choices students have regard to the
subjects
 they should
study
.
While
people
 argue that they should
study
subjects
 that are more beneficial in the upcoming years
such
 as science and technology, I believe that every student should have the right to
study
 the
subjects
 they enjoy.
TOPIC
 10: It is true that ex-prisoners become good members of
society
 and it is discussed that these are the best
people
 to speak to youngsters about the perils of committing a crime. I completely agree with
this
 because they can share their experiences and prevent them from doing something they might regret later on. EDITED: It is true that ex-prisoners become good, productive members of
society
 and it has been discussed by
people
 that they are the best
people
 to speak to teenagers about the perils of committing a crime. I completely agree with
this
view
 because they can share their experiences and prevent from doing something they might regret later on.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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