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In addition to making a profit, businesses also have social responsibilities. I completely agree, since businesses do a lot for society than just making money. EDITED: Businesses have always sought to make a profit but hearing people talk about companies’ social obligations is increasing everyday. I completely agree, since businesses do a lot for society than just making money.

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 6:
In addition
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 to making a profit,
businesses
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also
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 have social responsibilities. I completely agree, since
businesses
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 do a lot for
society
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 than just making money. EDITED:
Businesses
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 have always sought to make a profit but hearing
people
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 talk about companies’ social obligations is increasing everyday. I completely agree, since
businesses
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 do a lot for
society
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 than just making money.
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 7: It is true that many
people
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 are moving to cities looking for a better
life
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 but living in the
city
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 has it's own difficulties
such
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 as traffic, pollution, crime... In my opinion, the government should try and reduce these problems to make
city
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life
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 much easier. EDITED: It is true that most
people
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 are migrating to cities to look for a better
life
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 since they are known as places of opportunities but
city
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life
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 has it’s own difficulties
such
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 as traffic, pollution, crime… In my opinion, the governments should try and reduce these problems to make
city
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life
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 better for average inhabitants.
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 8: It is true that in some countries, many
people
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 want to live by themselves at the present time than in the past. In my
view
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,
this
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 has a more negative
view
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 than positive because living alone can cause depression and boredom. EDITED: In recent years, it has become more popular for
people
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 to live alone in the developed world than in the past. In my
view
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,
this
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 trend has a more negative impact than positive because living alone can cause depression and boredom.
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 9: It is true that some
people
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 believe that university students should
study
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 their desired
subjects
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while
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 others argue that they should only
study
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subjects
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 that are more beneficial in the upcoming years
such
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 as science and technology. I believe that every student should have the right to
study
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subjects
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 they enjoy. EDITED:
People
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 have different views about how much choices students have regard to the
subjects
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 they should
study
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.
While
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people
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 argue that they should
study
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subjects
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 that are more beneficial in the upcoming years
such
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 as science and technology, I believe that every student should have the right to
study
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 the
subjects
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 they enjoy.
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 10: It is true that ex-prisoners become good members of
society
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 and it is discussed that these are the best
people
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 to speak to youngsters about the perils of committing a crime. I completely agree with
this
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 because they can share their experiences and prevent them from doing something they might regret later on. EDITED: It is true that ex-prisoners become good, productive members of
society
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 and it has been discussed by
people
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 that they are the best
people
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 to speak to teenagers about the perils of committing a crime. I completely agree with
this
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view
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 because they can share their experiences and prevent from doing something they might regret later on.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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