In addition to making a profit, businesses also have social responsibilities. I completely agree, since businesses do a lot for society than just making money. EDITED: Businesses have always sought to make a profit but hearing people talk about companies’ social obligations is increasing everyday. I completely agree, since businesses do a lot for society than just making money.

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TOPIC

In addition

to making a profit,

businesses

also

have social responsibilities. I completely agree, since

businesses

do a lot for

society

than just making money. EDITED:

Businesses

have always sought to make a profit but hearing

people

talk about companies’ social obligations is increasing everyday. I completely agree, since

businesses

do a lot for

society

than just making money.

TOPIC

7: It is true that many

people

are moving to cities looking for a better

life

but living in the

city

has it's own difficulties

such

as traffic, pollution, crime... In my opinion, the government should try and reduce these problems to make

city

life

much easier. EDITED: It is true that most

people

are migrating to cities to look for a better

life

since they are known as places of opportunities but

city

life

has it’s own difficulties

such

as traffic, pollution, crime… In my opinion, the governments should try and reduce these problems to make

city

life

better for average inhabitants.

TOPIC

8: It is true that in some countries, many

people

want to live by themselves at the present time than in the past. In my

view

this

has a more negative

view

than positive because living alone can cause depression and boredom. EDITED: In recent years, it has become more popular for

people

to live alone in the developed world than in the past. In my

view

this

trend has a more negative impact than positive because living alone can cause depression and boredom.

TOPIC

9: It is true that some

people

believe that university students should

study

their desired

subjects

while

others argue that they should only

study

subjects

that are more beneficial in the upcoming years

such

as science and technology. I believe that every student should have the right to

study

subjects

they enjoy. EDITED:

People

have different views about how much choices students have regard to the

subjects

they should

study

While

people

argue that they should

study

subjects

that are more beneficial in the upcoming years

such

as science and technology, I believe that every student should have the right to

study

the

subjects

they enjoy.

TOPIC

10: It is true that ex-prisoners become good members of

society

and it is discussed that these are the best

people

to speak to youngsters about the perils of committing a crime. I completely agree with

this

because they can share their experiences and prevent them from doing something they might regret later on. EDITED: It is true that ex-prisoners become good, productive members of

society

and it has been discussed by

people

that they are the best

people

to speak to teenagers about the perils of committing a crime. I completely agree with

this

view

because they can share their experiences and prevent from doing something they might regret later on.

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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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