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Band 7.5

Your neighbors have recently written to you to complain about the noise from your flat. Write a letter to your neighbors. In your letter explain the reasons for the noise apologise describe what action you will take

Dear neighbour, I hope you are doing great. I got your letter in the morning saying that you are unhappy with the noise coming from my flat, and I'm sorry for the inconvenience. The reason for the disturbance is the renovation of the flat.
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 is necessary because the floor tiles were rough and the walls needed new paint.
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, my sister's marriage is coming
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 winter, so we wanted our home to be fresh. I know handling a baby with
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 disturbance is not an easy task. A baby needs a good amount of sleep, especially in the afternoon. After considering
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, I will strictly inform the workers to avoid all unnecessary volume like playing songs loudly, and try to halt the process in the afternoon, so that the baby can sleep properly. I apologise again for the inconvenience, and I promise that the construction won't
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 longer. Thank you, Ishaan

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coherence and cohesion
Try to separate your ideas into clear paragraphs. For example, discuss the noise explanation in one paragraph, the apology in another, and the actions you'll take in a third.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure the structure is smooth between sentences. You can use linking words like 'first', 'then', or 'finally' to guide the reader.
task achievement
While the tone is generally good, you can enhance it by expressing a bit more empathy towards your neighbors' situation.
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You addressed the neighbor's complaint and explained the reason for the noise clearly.
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Your apology shows you care about your neighbor's feelings.
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The letter has a friendly tone which is nice for community relationships.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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