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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now ‘one big traffic jam.’ How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In the
last
 three decades, more and more
people
 being purchased new cars which is a significantly increased amount of
car
 owners.
Nevertheless
 have a problem with traffic jams in many countries in the world. In
this
 essay, I totally agree with these views.
Therefore
 are the primary reason is redeveloping their
transport
system
.
First
 of all, I completely believe that there are true to dramatically increase in the
last
 thirty years because of their various types of missions. Put more simple it is dependent on
people
 who have to
work
 by
car
 or Some
people
work
 quite far area from their home.
As a result
, the main target is buying a
car
.
One
 of the perfect examples of
this
 is My husband and I we are both have a
car
 because we
work
 as taxi drivers and as a courier which is essential to the
car
. We couldn't
work
 without a
car
,
However
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,However
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 sometimes
people
 are getting lazier
such
 as not walking and running even when they are shopping with the
car
 just 5 walking minutes away from their accommodation.
Secondly
 and even more importantly though The government how to decrease and encourage their activity running too much traffic on the road. It is important to develop their
transport
system
.
That is
 to say that the state has to invest in
one
 of the best
transport
 companies reason why they have to increase the quality of train and
also
instead
 of an old train to alter improved train ,
Consequently
people
 are more likely to attend their quality and comfortable on
this
transport
system
.
One
 of the good examples of
this
 is The Australian government created a new project which is still improving their
transport
system
 especially trains since 2019.
One
 of the greatest survey results in Sydney 2021. In
Nws
Correct your spelling
News
 state
people
 are not only content but
also
 sell their own
car
 because of good
transport
. By way of conclusion, I once again hesitate as long as government want to get reduce the traffic problem state would have to improve their
transport
system
.
Therefore
 It is recommended that many
people
 get a weakness reason why they don't much that active life habit if you have enough time you have to use a
transport
system
 even bicycle or walk by yourself.
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