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Many countries are worried about the damage to the economy that coronavirus is causing. Give some examples of how coronavirus is damaging the economy and suggest possible solutions.

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Several
countries
 are concerned about the damage to the
economy
 that the coronavirus is causing.
firstly
 the coronavirus avoids commercial between
countries
.
Countries
 cannot sell raw materials to other
countries
.
People
 can't open their shops or businesses,
therefore
 the
economy
 has been suffering.
People
 are worried about infection. They always change and spread from country to country. They
don'twant
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don want
 to take the risk, want to take the risk,
they
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but they
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 prefer to stay home. Shopping malls cant sell any stuff because there is so much isolation they
cant
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can't
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 even go to work. Lots of companies are
sanked
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ranked
spanked
,
therefore
 the
economy
 is impacted badly.
Such
 as in Turkey, where lots of companies are
sanked
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ranked
spanked
tanked
 and the government has been dealing with the
corona virus
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coronavirus
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. Turkey's
economy
 has been collapsing since it started
inflaction
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inflation
inflexion
 has been climbing, all prices have been increasing, and being so expensive,
people
 can't even afford to Inflation has been rasing the whole world buy new clothes or smartphones. Life is getting difficult.
People
 are struggling with starving
people
 whose purchasing power has been decreased because the
economy
 has been destroyed by
coronavirus
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a coronavirus
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. there are lots of solutions,
such
 as finding a new vaccine and selling it all over the world. It preserves any damage or spread possibility. The vaccine will deactivate the
corona virus
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coronavirus
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 when it is taken to the patient
people
. They will recover from illness.
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