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In some countries children have very strict rules of behaviour, in other countries they are allowed to do almost anything they want. To what extent should children have to follow rules?

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There are many conversations about parenting. Many books were written about that and no united opinion here. Nurturing a child plays a significant role in their life. In some countries
children
 have very strict
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riles
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 of
behavior
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, in others they can do almost everything. So where is the right type of approach?
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one
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 hand it is very important to give
children
 freedom. It will help them to grow with no
limitation
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 in their mind.
Moreover
, strict
rules
 don’t help in
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 education process.
Children
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 afraid to make a mistake and just follow
rules
 without any creativity. Because of that many modern schools create an atmosphere of freedom, where
children
 can do almost everything. From
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 of
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rules
 were created because of experience. Despite the new approaches in parenting,
rules
 were checked
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 time. Many generations have been
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 in very strict conditions and, nothing bad happened. Right now,
children
 have too much attention to their persons.
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, they become very spoiled.
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 personally more for
rules
. I suppose that parenting is not only about developing creativity in
children
, but more about preparing them
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the
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adult life. And when we talk about adults, we talk about responsibility,
this
 is very important. To sum up, it is no one right approach for nurturing. Everybody should find their way of parenting for
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 better young
generation
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 future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • upbringing
  • discipline
  • autonomy
  • safety
  • responsibility
  • creativity
  • critical thinking
  • independence
  • boundaries
  • rebellion
  • holistic development
  • structure
  • nurturing environment
  • behavioral expectations
  • social norms
  • authority
  • decision-making skills
  • consequences
  • respect
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