Some people think studying from the past offers no benefit to today’s life, while others believe that history is a valuable source of information for us. Discuss both views and give our own opinion.

It is often argued that،
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studying
in previous time has
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impact
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I believe that
history
lead
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everyone in our life now and it's an important source
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information nowadays.Some would think that studying the past is pointless because it does not add any value to their future.
History
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rarely
bring
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information about how
people
can enhance and improve their quality of life, and
therefore
, they would rather focus on studying science and technology than
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learning
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learning
something
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outdated.
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this
point, some historical events
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interpreted based on personal perspectives to
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achieve
achive
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achieve
personal gains,
such
as authority, power, and money, affecting negatively
people
's religion and culture. for these reasons, returning back to the past would only bring old and
falisfied
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falsified
knowledge, which arent containing any
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significance
value at all to today's lifestyle.
on the other hand
, I would side with those who presume that learning
history
would strengthen the sense of patriotism. It helps young
people
have intensive insights into their own roots and how their countries
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evolved.
This
could stimulate their patriotism and pride, resulting in motivating them to work harder toward protecting and serving their nations.
For instance
, teaching
history
at schools would help students to understand how their
ansectors
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ancestors
defended their nations against the intruders as well as the importance of certain historical events. It is
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that the benefits of learning the past outweigh its disadvantages. To sum up, it might seem sensible that learning
history
is pointless because it does not hold any importance in
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of stimulating
people
's development.
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