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Some people trust their first impressions about a person's character because they believe their judgements are generally correct. Other people don't judge a person's character quickly because they believe first impressions are wrong. Get ready to to talk to an examiner about this issue.

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Some folks trust their primary feelings about an individual's personality because they argue these
judgements
 are totally accurate. Other populace
do
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 not judge
someone
's character rapidly because they believe
first
 emotions are incorrect. In the following paragraphs, I shall explain
this
 issue. On the one hand, acquiring experience in the span of life make individuals able to learn about some obvious traits that are guessable.
That is
 to say, encounters other
people
 and socialising with them make
people
 able to guess some primary information about other
people
 by a glance at them.
For instance
,
someone
 who has a paranoid character usually avoids making
a close connections
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 with strangers.
Moreover
,
people
 accept their
first
judgements
 about
someone
 because they had experienced their
judgements
 several times before that.
In other words
, they had done these trials and errors many times,
then
 made a collection of information about individuals' personalities which is unconscious. So, their
first
 feelings can be trustable themselves.
On the other hand
, there is no doubt that a person's personality is really complex and it makes
first
judgements
 about them unreliable. In short,
people
 can control their behaviour and hide their negative aspects. It occurs because some behaviours can be unacceptable and against social customs or rules. These negative behaviours lead to punishment.
Therefore
,
people
 learn to avoid punishment by hiding their unacceptable traits.
Furthermore
, some of our behaviours not only are not controllable
,
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 but
also
, are not conscious. If
people
 know about the power of unconscious aspects of
people
, they will not trust their glances
judgements
. Because everyone has unknown traits that even can make them surprised. So,
first
 impressions are an unreliable way to judge others. In conclusion, judging
someone
's character is reliable as same as it is unreliable.
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