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Countries with a long average working time are more economically successful than those countries which do not have a long working time. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days,
working
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the working
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 hour is one of the most crucial factors in part of people’s
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. In my opinion, I strongly agree with
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benefits
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the benefits
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 of a long working
time
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 outweigh its disadvantage and the
reason
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 to support arguments will be covered in
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reason
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 that spending a long
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 for work is
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quality
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 of
products
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. It means that there are more
quality
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 control steps before selling. From a senior project of Thai business students in a local university studying the
quality
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 of the same type of
products
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 between
Japan
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 and
Thailand
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, the result showed that the
products
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 made in
Japan
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 have more
quality
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 than those made in
Thailand
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 because there are ten steps to
quality
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 control in
Japan
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 but only three steps in
Thailand
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.
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, there is no doubt why many countries around the world trust the
products
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 from
Japan
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 more than
Thailand
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 affecting directly to their economy. The
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reason
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 is the skill of employees how that they got from a long average working
time
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.
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 skill is considerable.
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, based on the same studying, the employees spent
time
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 for work about 90 hours per week in
Japan
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 but only 30 hours per week in
Thailand
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, which means that
Japan
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’s workers have triple working
time
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.
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,
Japan
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’s workmen have more proficiency than Thai workmen. In conclusion, countries with a long average working
time
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 are the best choice for me because they have the
quality
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 of
products
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 and the considerable skill of employees. These are the
reason
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 they succeed in the economy more than countries with a short working
time
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic success
  • working hours
  • productivity
  • sustainable development
  • work-life balance
  • labor laws
  • efficiency
  • gross domestic product (GDP)
  • burnout
  • occupational health
  • technological innovation
  • industrialized nations
  • emerging economies
  • workforce
  • competitiveness
  • workplace culture
  • employee turnover
  • quality of life
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