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If you could change your hometown to make it a better place, what changes would you make? How would these changes improve your hometown?

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Even though I love the town where I grew up, it isn’t perfect. A few targeted improvements could make it even better. Specifically, I would create more opportunities for folk to gather together, with the goal of enhancing the sense of
community
 in the town. Unfortunately, my childhood home,
Merriltown
, does not offer enough opportunities for people to meet and socialize. The reason is that
Merriltown
 is about 20 kilometres from a major
city
. When people from
Merriltown
 seek entertainment like concerts, sporting
events
, and festivals, they usually go elsewhere. I think two changes could improve
this
 situation.
First
,
Merriltown
 should actively plan unique
community
events
 downtown. Currently,
city
 leaders assume that people would rather leave for entertainment, so they don’t put much effort into organizing a robust
community
 calendar.
This
 should change. If the
city
 would plan special
events
 that are not offered elsewhere in the region, there is no reason
Merriltown
 could not become an entertainment destination.
Secondly
,
Merriltown
 should make its downtown more pedestrian-friendly. Currently, the town’s streets are dominated by car traffic. It is not a very welcoming place for
crowd
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 to walk and congregate. If the
city
 would consider restricting traffic, widening the sidewalks, and enhancing park space near the downtown area,
community
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the community
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 might want to spend more leisure time in Morristown. Both of
these development share
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 a single objective: to bring the residents of Morristown together as a
community
. Organizing fun and meaningful
events
 would create opportunities for residents to meet and socialize with one another outside normal daily activities. These changes could
also
 instil a sense of association
pride
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 among residents who could boast, “my town has so many fun things to do!” If
Merriltown
 would make
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, it would be an even more special place to call home.
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