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The information about buying coffee and tea and drinking habit of people in five various Australian cities.

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The chart illustrates
a survey results
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 for citizens of five Australian cities who were buying and drinking
coffee
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 and tea. The five cities were Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart. Overall, it is clear from the data that the cities’ people used to consume
coffee
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 or tea inside
cafes
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 more than buying fresh or
instant
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coffee
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for
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at
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 home.
However
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, Adelaide figures show that residents who drink in
cafes
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 and the
one’s
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ones
one
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 who bought
instant
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coffee
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 are almost identical. Focusing on
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cafes
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cafe
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 numbers, most
of
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apply
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Hobart and Melbourne people used to drink
coffee
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 and tea inside
cafes
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, as its figures were almost identical around 63% of citizens. While
the
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the cafe's visitors
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cafes
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 visitors for the others cities recorded 61%, 56%,
49
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% for each
of
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Sydney, Brisbane, and Adelaide.
On the other hand
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,
coffee
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 buyers who prefer to make it
in
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at
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home
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the home
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 used to pick
instant
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coffee
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 more than fresh
coffee
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, where Hobart figure was the highest for
instant
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coffee
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, and
Sydeny
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Sydney
 was the lowest. Brisbane shows that its people pick it as low
of
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at
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 35% and Sydney was high at 43%.
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