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Due to the influence of worldwide media such as television and computers, the gap between cultures is decreasing. The introduction of this global culture is a great benefit to the world. To what extent do you agree with this viewpoint?

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The student is considered
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a powerful factor contributing to our potential
future
.
Therefore
, what
school
 should teach them is
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controversial. Some argue that
History
 must be seen as the most important subject, while some believe that Science and
Technology
 are the
two
subjects
 that should be focused on. Personally, I would say that these
subjects
 are equally important in the
school
 curriculum. It is said that
this
 modern-day is a reflection of our
History
 as well as a prediction of our
future
 tomorrow, so I strongly believe in the impactful of
the
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History
 in
school
. What
History
 could be taught in
school
 might be the stories of war in their nations in the past, how the ancient civilization was born and collapsed, and how our ancestors lived in the extreme condition,… And all of that convey various messages for us today, especially students,
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that we must cherish things we take
it
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for granted nowadays and
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 from
the
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past failure,… While
History
 is the subject that we could look back and appreciate for what we have today, Science and
Technology
 are the
two
subjects
 leading us to a bright
future
. These
two
subjects
 play a vital role in
the
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human life, and various
technology
 devices due to the theories of
two
 fields are altering the ordinary kinds of stuff that people are getting trouble doing every day, enhancing the living standard of numerous individuals.
For instance
, the washing machine, the cooker, the air conditioner,... are contributing to a better experience at home. Every subject above
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 an unchangeable role in human life, while
History
 defines who we are, Science and
Technology
brightens
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 our
future
.
Although
 there are many arguments between educationalists as well as many people outside
this
 field,
but
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I believe that those
subjects
 have their own indispensable part in the
school
 curriculum.
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