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Every yeay several language die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages n the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

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There are several
languages
exist
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 in the world for better communication among different nations.
However
, out of which some
die
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who die
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 annually ,
but
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 some people think that
this
 is not pivotal, as life will be smoother if there are fewer
languages
 in the world.
This
 has become a debatable issue and I totally disagree with
this
 notion and will elaborate
the
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 reasons
further
 in subsequent paragraphs with relevant examples.
Firstly
, half of the economy of a country is based on Globalisation.
Moreover
, for
that
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,that
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 every country needs to know about numerous
languages
, because
then
 only they can connect with them easily. Another aspect involves the variations in cultures. Every nation carries different customs.
Moreover
, to maintain a
relation
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relationship
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 with their culture or to know about that culture , one needs to follow their
language
first
.
For example
, in Germany, people celebrate a festival namely "Reeperbahn " and to attend that one should have knowledge
regarding
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german
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the german
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language
.
In contrast
, there are some snags
of
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in
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 several
languages
. For epitome, more
languages
 make communication complicated.
Therefore
,
this
 issue can easily
be mitigate
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be mitigated
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, if the reduction
arise
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arises
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 in the context of enhancement of
language
. Moving
further
,
English
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the English
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language
 is replacing minority speeches.
For instance
,
marathi
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Marathi
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,
harynvi
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Haryanvi
,
tamil
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Tamil
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 etc. Individuals are more diverting towards using
of
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apply
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English. To conclude, what I find convenient for humankind in
case
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the case
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 of
languages
 is, for a better economy, the knowledge of
variety
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a variety
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 of
languages
 is
must
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a must
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,
besides
this
, the minorities can continue their trend in their own regions, but no
such
 solution is rendered for die out
languages
 as the culture is westernisation-based.
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