In marriages today, some argue that it is the responsibility of both spouses to earn a living for the family. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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An immensely controversial phenomenon in the contemporary epoch relating to the matter of union because many folks lock horns that it is the accountability of
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couples to have resources for the family.I firmly coincide
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withstand the stated notion.
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discourse will
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elucidate my assertion in the forthcoming paragraph.
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,traditionally,
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stayed at home to do house chores but nowadays
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parents work
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the trending economy is vastly demanding
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that there is zero to save for future utilization.
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are limiting the number of youngsters they get so that they can be able to support them fully without so
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challenges,
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research done by the University of Nairobi depicts that 80% of men prefer
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unlike in the past
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women
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housewifes
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.
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,
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trend of
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is
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that a slight disruption of resources causes havoc in the parentage.
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spent less time with the kids which makes them have less contact.
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,they have no idea how adolescent
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time and their
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are influenced by television,friends and technology.
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, due to the challenges of the economy,
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upbringing is
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affected.
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research show that
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juvenile
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delinquency is on the increase.
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,
commitment
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the commitment
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of
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partner
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to employment can bring negative
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children if time is not created for them. To sum up,the composition,
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would like to restate my
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that economic challenges
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facilitated
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mate
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to have a source of income unlike in the past where
women
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were
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meant
ment
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meant
to be a
housewifes
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housewife
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which has led to less contact with little one.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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