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The increasing of private car lead to high level of pollution. Do you agree with this statement and what can be done to solve this problem?

#car #level #pollution
In
this
 era, new modules of
cars
 come out every year. As it turns out,
people
 are buying more
cars
.
Although
this
 could help the economy,
but
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it affects greatly in
term
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terms
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 of
environment
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the environment
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. More
cars
 mean more
pollution
 emitted
in
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 the air. In my opinion, I do believe the
increasing
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 in private care do lead to
high
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a high
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 level of
pollution
 and
fortunately
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 there are
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severals
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 way to solve
this
 problem.
Firstly
, to tackle the problem, public transportation should be improved
regarding
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 its quality and pricing. In many developed countries, I can see that the system of public transportation reduced the use of
private
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the private
a private
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car
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cars
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. For
examples
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, what can be done is to establish terms and conditions
in
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for
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 using public vehicles
such
 as purchasing one ticket, a person is allowed to use any trains and buses for an hour without having to pay extra fees. In
this
 way,
people
 would see that public transportation is more cost-efficient and at the same time
help
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 reduce
pollution
.
Secondly
, purchasing a
car
 should be made harder. By suggesting
this
, it means that if a person already has a
car
, there is no need to buy a new one.
Car
company
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companies
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 and the government should keep track of who or which family already has a
car
 and set a limit on how many
cars
 can be owned per family.
This
 would make
people
 think harder about the choices they need to make when purchasing a
car
.
Last
 but not least, to get rid of
private
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a private
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car
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cars
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 that
use
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 fuels and
replace
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 them with
electric
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an electric
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car
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cars
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.
Electric
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An electric
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car
 has become more appealing to many drivers and is more
environmental
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 friendly. If
electric
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an electric
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car
 is sold cheaper,
this
 could
also
 reduce the carbon emission in the air and
pollution
 as
people
 switch to these
cars
instead
. In conclusion, I think the increase in
private
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the private
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car
do
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 lead to high
pollution
 and contribute to global warming.
However
, if some regulations can be implemented, it could solve
this
 problem.
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