Countries are becoming mor and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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in day-to-day life.
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technology has impacted enormously on human lifestyle compared to earlier.
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, nowadays, nations are attempting to become equal ,
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of that the community
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able to find
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particular products
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any destination
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the globe. Even though some of them argued that
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technological progress has good sides as well as bad sides for everyone. In
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becoming common among the local communities . As long as the computer-based science created many beneficial apps which
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to do online shopping.
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, a person who wanted to buy things which were not available in their country
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was able to purchase through e-bay, Amazon and so on.
Consequently
, it has assisted with benefits for customers b, where they have a chance to reduce transport expenses and are able to reduce time-wasting.
On the other hand
, as a negative impact low- income earners do not have the capability to face their development facilities. As they attempted to change their lifestyle like other
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people.
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was compelled to get costly and especially, international imported items which are not affordable to
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by them.
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, they faced social issues in their daily life as well as wherever they are not accepted by others. In conclusion, the whole
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world
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becoming closer to each other. As long as human beings have invented
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precious inventions which help to
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in society. It is clear now, certainly, it ensures good and bad effects
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the human . If we try to choose only necessary factors , we will be able to survive in
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world with a healthy lifestyle.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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