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You are planning to go and study English at a school overseas. You would like some information about their courses. Write a letter to the school. In your letter Ask about the school Say what kind of accommodation you want Mention any special request you have (for example diet).

#study #english #school #information #courses #accommodation #request #diet
Dear Sir/Madam, I am planning to get admission to your
school
 in the English course. I am writing to get information regarding the
school
 facilities like library and residence as well as special diet plans. The
first
 thing I would like to know about
the
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school
 location. Could you please give me
current
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the current
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 address of the
school
?
Moreover
,
i
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 would like to know about
library
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the library
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 of
school
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the school
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that
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and
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 how
i
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 can get membership
of
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 it as I have to read English literature books to complete my study. It might be useful if you could provide me
information
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with information
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 regarding
residence
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the residence
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 hostel . I am looking for sharing
room
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 with
Indian
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an Indian
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 community student.
Furthermore
,
is
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 there any sports
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facilities
facilties
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facilities
are
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available in the hostel because
i
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 would like to play soccer in
evening
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the evening
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 time to relax my mind. I would be thankful if you could give me details about
diet
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the diet
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 plan of the hostel mess since
i
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 have
allergy
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an allergy
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 to wheat flour so I cannot eat bread
make
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 from flour.
In addition
, it would be great if
I
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apply
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you could give
a
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me a
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vegetarian meal. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully,
Komaljeet
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Kamaljeet
 Singh
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