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Many young people leave school with a negative attitude towards learning. What are the causes of this? Suggest some solutions.

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Currently, so many young people who graduate from school have a negative attitude towards learning. In
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 situation and propose some corresponding solutions. A wide range of factors contributes to the fact that a lot of school-leavers have a negative attitude towards learning. In the
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 place, most schools focus on
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’ academic performance much more than practical skills. Unfortunately, when
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 finish their schooling, they realise that practical skills are actually more important than academic achievement in society;
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 school-leavers are disappointed and lose their motivation to learn more. In the
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 place, the majority of teachers still use traditional methodologies which encourage rote memorisation and standardised tests.
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 feel that learning is an arduous process, which is not stimulating at all.
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, the modern culture does not
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education
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 enough. Traditionally,
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 was highly valued, yet sadly, modern young people gradually
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 financial success more than
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. Fortunately, several solutions have been found. The most urgent solution is
education
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 must be geared to
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’ needs in the future. Essentially, schools have to look at how to meet the demand of a changing society and provide more practical skills and knowledge for
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.
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, the responsibility for changing teaching methods falls on teachers. In essence, since teachers’ pedagogies directly determine whether
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 enjoy learning or not, teachers should kindle
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’ interest in learning by applying more engaging methods in the class.
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, the responsibility for promoting
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 rests with the government. As I would be hard-pressed to imagine that our future society
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education
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 less and less, it is high time the government started to educate the general public so that youngsters will see the
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 of
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 more. Overall, a growing number of young people do not like learning
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 after they leave school due to various reasons. So the key is, I believe, to take actions
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 as changing the focus of schools, modifying teachers’ approaches to teaching and promoting the
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 of
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