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The maps below show the development of the Paradise island for tourism purposed.

The maps below show the development of the Paradise island for tourism purposed.
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The maps illustrate that a barren
Island
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 underwent some structural alternations to promote tourism. From a broad view,
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tourism development has targeted the central and western parts of the
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 by making the
island
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 reachable through a pier
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 the vegetation and eastern part of the
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 has remained unchanged. To pay meticulous attention to tourism-oriented changes it can be seen that the
Island
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 to align itself to the tourists' requirements has constructed some accommodations in the middle and western parts connected to each other just via footpaths.
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, a restaurant and reception
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 has been erected between these areas of accommodation, and access to
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 buildings has been possible by some vehicle tracks which have been stretched from the pier where tourists can go southward to approach and enjoy surfing boats. By furtherance of aquatic recreations
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, visitors are able to arrive at the beach area by going westward of the
Island
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 where the swimming area is devised on the edge of the western area. To add to water sports amenities the pier in the south is the best place where boats can dock there.

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