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Many people argu that in order to improve educational quality, high school students are encouraged to make comments or even criticism on their teachers. Other think it will lead to loss of respect and discipline in the classroom. Discuss both views and give your Opinion.

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There has been a controversy about whether
students
 should judge their
teachers
. I think the advantages of judging their
teachers
 outweigh its disadvantages, my reasons will be explained in the following paragraphs.
First
, the teaching quality can be improved by making comments about their
teachers
. It's commonplace that not all
teachers
 are good at teaching; they may know the concept, but they can't present that knowledge in an attractive way.
As a result
, some
students
 might feel bored and start sleeping. At
this
 point, if
students
 can tell their
teachers
 about the drawbacks of their lessons, the teaching quality can be promoted.
Second
, making comments about
teachers
 can protect
students
 to a large extent. Take China as an example. I grew up in China;
hence
, I know how the Chinese school system works. In the past, it was quite universal that
teachers
 constantly punished their
students
,
such
 as beating
students
, so as a
further
 control
students
' thoughts. At
this
 point,
although
students
 had higher
grades
, they were at the expense of their souls.
On the contrary
, if
students
 were allowed to criticize their
students
, it was advantageous to the growth of children because they dared to challenge the authority.
On the other hand
, it has some setbacks as well.
For example
, it can negatively affect
students
'
grades
. As we know,
although
 a strict teacher can be tiresome sometimes, he can indeed help
students
 in their studies. Should
students
 are taught by a rigorous teacher, their
grades
 can increase dramatically.
Nevertheless
, if
students
 have the right to mark their
students
,
this
 kind of teacher is bound to be market very low.
As a result
, all the "good"
teachers
 are gone, and
students
'
grades
 will certainly decrease in a relaxing environment. In conclusion, there are some merits and demerits of making comments about
teachers
, but I still believe its advantages outstrip its disadvantages.
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