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Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it legal requirement. To what extend do you think laws are needed to make people recycled more of their waste?

#people #waste #homes #governments #requirement #laws
The
waste
 is really
harm
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for
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 human life. There are many disadvantages that able influenced the environment due to the spread of
waste
. Several of
general
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 public assume that it is not enough if the
waste
recycled
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is recycled
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 from homes. While other
people
 argue that the most useful way to increase recycling is
governments
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for governments
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 should make rules. Personally, it seems to me that
the
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 good environment is not only from homes recycled but
also
 from good regulations. It is true that
people
 should pay attention
for
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to
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 their surroundings because it can make their activities are
easily
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easy
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 to do. The ministry
also
 should make regulations in
term
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 of
recycled
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recycling
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 the
waste
, and encourage folk to clean and maintain their neighbourhood. To show the evidence for
this
 case, there are many
people
 that always doing the harmful things because throw away the rubbish in the wrong place, and it can be damaged
other
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people
.
In addition
, if the ministry
make
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 a legal requirement, the
people
 would follow the rules because most of them feel afraid
with
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of
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 the
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strict
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strick
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strict
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 laws.
Therefore
, to make
convenient
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it convenient
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area
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areas
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 the general public should obey the laws
from
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of
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 governments and
recycled
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recycle
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 the
waste
proper
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properly
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with
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in
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 the right ways.
However
, there are several
community
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communities
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 that still do not know
about
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apply
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how to recycle the rubbish because they
are
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lack
of
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creativity. So that, public and government should make co-operation to give subject for
people
 in
order
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the order
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 they are know how to
recycled
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recycle
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 the
waste
 from home.
For instance
, after
people
using
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use
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 the products they can
changed
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change
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 those to the items that have more advantages and
able
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are able
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 to use
from
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 other
people
. In conclusion, the best thing to change products and make those acceptable
are
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is
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 recycled.
General
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 public
agree
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agrees
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 that recycling the
waste
 should get
helping
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help
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 from
government
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the government
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 in order to give knowledge for
people
 to maintain the surroundings from the
harm
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harmful
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waste
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Waste management
  • Recycling
  • Sustainability
  • Mandatory
  • Voluntary
  • Legislative measures
  • Environmental impact
  • Public awareness
  • Regulation
  • Sanctions
  • Compliance
  • Recycling facilities
  • Consumer behavior
  • Waste reduction
  • Resource conservation
  • Circular economy
  • Eco-friendly
  • Biodegradable
  • Landfill
  • Global initiative
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