Some people think high school graduates should travel or work for a period of time instead of going directly to study at university. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of both approaches.

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countries
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prefer to go
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work or travel
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students
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studying in high school. It
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disadvantages than
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advantages
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advantages
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education leads to provide a platform for
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earing
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money. But based on the Indian civilization, are not
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to do work while
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. They
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student's to complete their assignments and seminars
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given by the tutors, not to be involved in other things. In some
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they are giving additional classes for drawing, music, and sports while
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school time,
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is the only benefit for
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.
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, the
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come out from these types of
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not having experience in at least
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field of study.
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, the
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all types of
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exposure
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to the
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while getting their
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, they are not
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to complete graduation by
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method,
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training for each area they wish to complete their
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well settled
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province
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having vast knowledge in their area of study, with
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thinking ability than paper bugs. It will increase the competition and
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not come
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in the job market. To conclude,
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most
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the graduates nowadays,
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for part-time jobs for getting money for their
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need the involvement of government help to provide more openings for
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, those willing to do
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part time
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jobs.
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