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Many claim that the fast food industry had a negative effect on the environment, eating habits, and families. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

#food #industry #effect #environment #habits #families
NOWADAYS THE PACE OF LIFE IS GETTING FASTER AND FASTER AND
AS A
RESULT
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,RESULT
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 THERE IS AN UNDENIABLE GROWING TENDENCY TO ORDER FOR A MEAL FROM FAST-
FOOD
 CHAINS. SOME ARGUE THAT THE JUNK
FOOD
 INDUSTRY HAS A DETRIMENTAL EFFECT ON BOTH INDIVIDUALS’ LIVES AND THE ENVIRONMENT.
THIS
 ESSAY WILL EXPLAIN WHY I TOTALLY AGREE WITH
THIS
 STATEMENT BASED ON THE HARMFUL EFFECTS OF FAST
FOOD
 ON THE SYSTEMIC HEALTH OF PEOPLE AND THE ENVIRONMENT.
FIRST
 AND FOREMOST, IN MODERN AND HECTIC LIFE, NEEDLESS TO SAY, MOST HAS TO PREFER TO EAT FAST
FOOD
INSTEAD
 OF HOMEMADE COOK. UNFORTUNATELY,
THIS
 HABIT CAUSES SOME DISEASES TO BE MORE PREVALENT
SUCH
 AS HIGH BLOOD PRESSURE, CARDIAC DISEASES AND OBESITY. TO
EXTENT
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AN EXTENT
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, A PERSON WHO GIVES A QUICK ORDER FOR DINNER WILL CONSUME REFINED SUGAR, AND WILL NOT MOVE TO COOK. WHEN THE LACK OF EXERCISE AND CONSUMING PROCESSED SUGAR GET TOGETHER, GAINING WEIGHT AND INCREASED FAT RATIO WILL BE INDISPENSABLE RESULTS.
FURTHERMORE
, PLASTICS USED FOR THE PACKAGING OF FAST FOODS ARE NOT RENEWABLE MATERIALS. AS A CONSEQUENCE THEY HAVE HIGHLY DETRIMENTAL EFFECTS ON
NATURE
. TO ILLUSTRATE, WHEN SOMEONE GIVES AN ORDER FOR A BURGER, THE PACKAGE OF BURGER WILL BE THROWN INTO THE
NATURE
 AFTER A WHILE AND IT WILL REMAIN THERE FOR YEARS WITHOUT SHOWING A DAMAGE. THE
NATURE
 SHOULD BE PROTECTED THESE KINDS OF HARMFUL THINGS BECAUSE IT CAN NOT PROTECT ITSELF. TO SUM UP,
ALTHOUGH
 FAST
FOOD
 CHAINS SEEM TO SAVE TIME, THEY INCREASE SYSTEMIC DISEASES AND GIVE A HARM TO THE
NATURE
 IN THE END.
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