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People naturally resist making changes in their lives. What kind of problems can this cause? What solutions can you suggest?

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It is normal that some people easily resist changes in their life. Since change can ruin life's stability,
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 as a job's position and advantage. In another way, it might come from belief and misunderstanding about changing something. The majority person wants stability when they receive enough benefits from it. They may be scared or worried about losing past benefits when change comes.
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, they choose to against for protecting their own interest.
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, Thailand's craft beer business is illegal in small and medium enterprises (SMEs). Apart from health safety, it
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 produces disadvantages in the large business of alcoholic beverages.
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, these people resist the law changes that allow SMEs to produce craft beer.
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, beliefs and misunderstandings can make society against the change. public beliefs that have been passed down from past generations can affect understanding nowadays.
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, the GMO technology's misunderstanding is caused by the belief that consuming GMO products is not safe. Since there are non-organic plants which through genetic modified in the laboratory and grow inappropriately. Moving to the solution of resistance community.
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, the solution about people who will lose benefits should have a negotiation to find a way to lose a small amount of benefit.
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, if it is about the misunderstanding. It should create the right information and demonstrate the benefit of changing. Inviting the crowd who resist expressing their opinions about changing direction as well.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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