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Online classes make conventional classrooms unnecessary. To what extent do you agree/disagree ?

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In many regions, online
classes
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 make the traditional classroom models unnecessary. I totally disagree with the notion of
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 opinion and there are two principal reasons for
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. One point which I believe to be pivotal is the indisputable fact that studying through a virtual environment can overcome
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 constraints and geographical boundaries. Take a good example of it is me, at the
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 grade of middle school I had to go to many extra
classes
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. But my parents were busy with their work so no one can take me to the extra
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 and a good way to solve that matter is e-learning. For me, I think it is very suitable
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 for me and for my family.
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, it sometimes had problems with my network to connect to join the
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. Yet, perhaps the strongest argument in favour of my optimism about the
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 in the comfort of one’s own home is that it saves a lot of
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 in the process move from school or house to the extra
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 and it is
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 cheaper than the conventional
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.
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, during the pandemic overbreak in my country
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 year, I had to get access to and familiar with web-based
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, the period of
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 isolated was the
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 had learned most skills in my life
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 as design, making PowerPoint, coding, and editing videos. The internet has many online course providers and many courses are very quality and nearly free. At the moment, many advents of online courses that many people can require the knowledge in a cheap way. To conclude, I once again reiterate my position that online
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 have many positive faces due to people can get access to knowledge without worrying about
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 constraints and geographical boundaries.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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