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Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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It is often argued that
homework
 shouldn't be given by teachers to their
students
, while others say that doing
homework
 is very useful for improving
education
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 of
students
.
This
 essay will discuss both these points of view and argue in favour of the latter. on the one hand, people who resist giving
homework
 may want
rest
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. take,
for
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 those who choose to rest from
a
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homework
. their minds can stay clear.
In other words
, it helps not burn out from studying.
Also
,
accurate
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 practice may not be possible.
Therefore
, their parents should search for resources that can help them do their
homework
. If
homework
 is assigned, there is a reliance on the student, their parents, or their guardians to locate resources that can help them understand the content.
Homework
 is often about practice, but if the core concepts of that information are not understood or inaccurately understood,
then
 the results are the opposite of what is intended. If inaccurate practice is performed, it becomes necessary for the teacher to
first
 correct the issue and
then
 reteach it, which prolongs the learning process. Doing
homework
,
on the other hand
, can summarize what children have learned and may even improve your knowledge of school topics. high school
students
 who complete
homework
 regularly will score higher on tests and earn better grades than those who do not.
Moreover
, solving different kinds of problems will be solved easily. In my opinion, despite all the cons of
homework
, children's
schoolache
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schoolteacher
 depends on how children will do
homework
. In conclusion,
i
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 believe that home task
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strong foundation for
students
 who
wants
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 to develop.
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  • Instills discipline
  • Deepen understanding
  • Independent learning
  • Reinforcement
  • Parental involvement
  • Curriculum insight
  • Burnout
  • Student stress
  • Leisure time
  • Relevance of assignments
  • Project-based learning
  • Interactive learning
  • Individual learning styles
  • Conducive study environment
  • Homework policy
  • Balanced approach
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