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grafting some fixed relation time onto a busy schadule may lead not only to a less hectic lifestyle, but also to a healthier mind and body.

#relation #time #schadule #lifestyle #mind #body
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spending
a great deal of
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a lot of
many
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 hours
on
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in
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workplace
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the workplace
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 make people frustrated if they have to just concentrate and be
adsorbed
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absorbed
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on
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in
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 their duties. in my opinion,
allowing
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by allowing
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 employees to have a relation
time
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 on their working interests, they can not only not get distracted but
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 will have greater efficiency. Workers spend most of their
time
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 at work, concentrating on their determined tasks.
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, they have to endure the endless meetings and cope with all problems in their workplace. their boss might have
constanely
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constantly
 asked them to prepare some presentations and determine some findings for
sevvere
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severe
 issues.
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, they require to have
this
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oppot=rtunity
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opportunity
 to talk to a person and reduce their tension. so spending some limited
time
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withe
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with
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 their colleague to reveal
this
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tention
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tension
. sometimes people experience
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the feeling
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feeling
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feelings
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 of disillusionment just because of some failures or even extremely miserable due to family issues and
as a
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result
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 they are not likely to be able to concentrate on their tasks and
indcate
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indicate
indicated
 best of themselves. they,
therefore
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, need to be allowed to allocate part of their
worktime
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work time
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 to take advantage of
one
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 person,
preferrably
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preferably
 a kind and supportive
one
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 to share his emotion or just want to have
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company
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a company
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 with professional
one
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 and benefit from a useful consultation. so it is viable to have a better and more important than that beneficial worktime if employers give the
privilage
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privilege
 of sending some
fix
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time
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 on
personal
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a personal
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 conversation in their
company
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. in conclusion, the
time
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 that
one
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 employer
allocate
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allocates
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 in the schedule of their own
company
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 having
relationship
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a relationship
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 with someone special might have
great
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a great
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impact on
impacton
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impact on
 the
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benefit
benefits
benefir
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benefit
 of the
company
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.
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