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Question 1: I started the first training day in the municipality of Abu Arish province on Monday the date 20.06.2022. I went to the Employee Relations
Department
 and the duties were divided between me and the other interns. My work duties during these two weeks in the management
department
 were the office desk on the
system
. I realized the devices are working on a Local Area Network (LAN) network
system
. Through sharing data and information with the staff working with me in the same
department
. the following has been done
according to
 my two-week plan: 1- Access to the
system
 of the Ministry of Municipal and Rural Affairs and trained to export and supply reports and employees' leave electronically through the correspondence
system
. 2- Write letters to the Human Resources staff and print them. 3- Use Microsoft Office software to perform the rest of the tasks. 4-Some important and urgent letters have been issued to all sections of the municipality (maintenance and operation, technical support
department
, it
department
) all of which are located in the
system
 of the Ministry of Municipal and Rural Affairs under one fast, strong and secure database. 5- The server is responsive and I have not encountered problems or weaknesses in response, and the devices were Lenovo and HP efficient and of high quality. Question 2: By the date of 30.06.2022 on Thursday, I am going to start training in the IT
department
, to practice on my computer externally.
such
 as disintegration, format work, installation of internet wires, and knowledge of the IP address of the computer that I will work on.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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