Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema other says to be fully enjoyed films need to be seen in a cinema. Discuss both these views and give your own opinión

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of technology at our

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people

often choose

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movies

on their

device

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devices

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like mobile or tablets. But some

people

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movies

cinema

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their favourite

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and actors. I would prefer to watch

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or cell phone rather than going to

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the

people

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mentality

who choose to watch

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movie

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on their device. Some

people

prefer to stay at home lying on their bed eating their favourite snacks and watching the

movie

their enjoyment

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on their bed. Some

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think

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that if I will go to

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the cost of

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, transport cost , snacks cost which will sum up the amount

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on the other hand

take out time to go to see the

movie

. So they take

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subscription and watch all the

movies

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the month without any restrictions.

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in Youngsters because they have to

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wisely as per their pocket money.

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, Some viewers are so

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on the day of reléase

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show, because they want to create status in the society. Others are so

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to watch

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movie

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cinema

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because

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the real enjoyment of watching action

movies

with 3d

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only can be seen in theatres.

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people

are not in the group of

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daily on their devices. They are the real fan of the

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and the experience they get in that they

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fulfil

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fulfil

their wants.

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movies

cinema

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will not be outdated but will go some more decades. To culminate, the

people

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opinión

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opinions

varies significantly, but it is more joyful and

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interesting

intersting

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interesting

watching

movie

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the

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cell phone or

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Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema other says to be fully enjoyed films need to be seen in a cinema. Discuss both these views and give your own opinión

Fully explain your ideas

The Best way to reduce poverty in developing countries is by giving up to six years of free education, so that they can at least read, write and use numbers. To what extent do you agree or disage?

In many countries, people have health problems because they choose to live in unhealthy ways. what do you think the reasons for this and how can it be solved?

many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?

The qualities a person needs to become truly successful in today's world cannot be learned at a university or similar academic institution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In some schools and universities, girls tend to choose art subjects (e.g. literature), and boys tend to choose science subjects (e.g. physics). Why do you think this is so? Should this tendency be changed?