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1. Some people believe that violence in the media, such as in television programs and films, directly results in violent behaviour. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is a common belief among modern citizens that explicit violence characteristic of media
such
 as movies and televised programs directly stimulates aggressive behaviour in real life. While some
people
 support
such
 an argument to the fullest, I firmly disagree with
this
 idea. In
this
 essay, I shall delve deep into both sides and give out my logical conclusion. On the one hand, overexposure to media-based violence could provoke pugnacious thoughts. To elucidate, a narrow margin of
people
 are unable to separate reality from fiction and believe
such
 actions in movies are acceptable in real life.
For example
, in America, where there is little censorship in the entertainment industry and violent films are easily accessible to everyone, there are a number of physical aggressions and shootouts present every year.
However
,
such
 an argument is only correct to some extent. In fact, without the sadistic intention from the start
people
 would be unhinged even
through
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though
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 the exposure to violent films and television programs.
On the other hand
, these media provide nothing but entertainment to the audience. In reality, gruesome content is nothing new and has been around since the dawn of time, appearing
first
 in the form of books and has had little effect on the
people
 of that era.
Therefore
, the argument that media-based violence directly affects the healthy minds of
people
 is unfounded.
In addition
, they provide great relaxation in
this
 era of stress and anxiety, making viewers feel more lively and broadening their horizons to some degree. In the final analysis,
although
 in some cases, gruesome films could contribute to the pugnacious demeanour of some. On most occasions, these movies and televised programs provide nothing but mere entertainment to their audience and have little to no effect on their overall behaviour.
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