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These days people pay more attention to artists (writers, painters and so on) and give less importance to science and technology. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, various kinds of
artists
 are able to reach the population instantly and become well-known around the globe swiftly with the help of social
media
. Some people have the idea that they idolise celebrities and shift their attention from important subjects
such
 as
science
 and
technology
 while others may hold a different point of
view
. In my opinion, I strongly agree with the fact that people are spending more time focusing on celebrities and neglecting the
importance
 of
science
 and
technology
. In
this
 essay, I would like to state my
view
 with examples and explain why I am on the side of the argument. The most compelling reason for my point of
view
 is the outreach of social
media
such
 as Facebook and Twitter. Famous
artists
such
 as singers and pop stars can easily catch the attention of the crowd and they may idolize them without realizing their work completely. Promoting their artworks throughout
such
 platforms can build a strong fandom supporting them around the clock. It will definitely make the population overlook important subjects.
For instance
, they may have overlooked the
importance
 of pandemics highlighting the
importance
 of social distancing and wearing face masks, they will not miss a single moment of what their favourite
artists
 had for breakfast. Another reason for my strong point of
view
 is that
importance
 of
science
 and
technology
 is not really advertised well in the eyes of the public.
For example
, there are many popular shows that search for talents like American got talent and Master chefs . These shows are often made to pop up on our social
media
 where important achievements
such
 as scientific discoveries and technological breakthroughs are mainly hidden under. In conclusion, I agree with the idea that people nowadays worship and give their complete attention to their favourite
artists
 while neglecting
science
 and technologies because of social
media
 outreach and ineffective advertising of them. I would like to suggest the government launch campaigns promoting the
importance
 of
science
 and
technology
 and free workshops and tv programs highlighting them.
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