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2. Some people think that men and women have different qualities. Therefore, some certain jobs are suitable for men and some jobs are suitable for women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is widely believed that males and females have unique traits that decide which
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 are suitable for them. While some people may disagree with
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 point of view, I partly agree with it. In
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men
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 and
women
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 can do the same
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. To elucidate, there are
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 that suit both
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's characteristics
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 as accountants, managers and governors. These
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 do not require any unique traits to do but their intelligence and devotion, which can be done the same by males or females.
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, anyone having enough of these qualities is able to do these
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 effectively regardless of their gender.
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, there are occupations which need special characteristics that only
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 have
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 as construction workers or nurses.
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, I hold the belief that males and females should apply for
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 which suit their traits. As a matter of fact, some unique characteristics are more pronounced in a different gender than others.
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,
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 are considered to have more strength than
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, while
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 tend to be more careful than
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.
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,
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 are usually more suitable for
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 requiring physical strength
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 as bricklayers or construction workers whilst
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 are more effective working as nurses. In conclusion,
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 and
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 doing the same
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 can be advantageous to some extent, I would argue that different genders should have different occupations.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender roles
  • inherent qualities
  • social dynamics
  • merit-based selection
  • advancements in technology
  • levelled the playing field
  • gender stereotypes
  • equal opportunities
  • physical differences
  • workplace
  • evolving
  • traditional view
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