Nowadays, an increasing number of people with health problems are using alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their normal doctor. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Every culture on
this
planet
evolve
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differently, to survive they discover traditional
medicines
from what every available around them, and
now a days
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nowadays
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, modern science is getting more sophisticated and
develop
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developing
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lots of
medicines
and treatments that are proven and available around the world. But many
people
still
use
the traditional
medicines
by
them self
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themself
themselves
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and avoid
to consult
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the
doctor
. In my opinion, even if
people
use
alternative
medicines
still they should visit
the
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a
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normal
doctor
.
Otherwise
, it may
be
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get worse.
To begin
with,
alternative
medicines
developed
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were developed
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years
a go
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ago
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, many
people
are trusting
it
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them
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and
use
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using
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it
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them
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in their daily life. Today's lifestyle and food
different
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are different
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from our ancienter, and there are many new
disease
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diseases
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are
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that are
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developing every day. If
people
use
home remedies to treat the
disease
and wait for several days and they might not know or fill but it may get more severe.
For example
, nowadays, diabetes is getting very common. if someone
try
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to treat it by
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himself
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him self
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himself
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and
use
traditional
medicines
. they will never know
that
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whether
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it getting
cure
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cured
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or getting worse without
consult
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consulting
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the
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doctor
.
In addition
, they
also
not
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know, how
much dose
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many doses
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of traditional
medicine
they required
base
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based
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on their glucose level.
Furthermore
, Many new
disease
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diseases
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are developing, which
initially
fills like common or known
disease
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diseases
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and
people
try to
use
alternative
medicine
, and
as a result
, they will not recover from it. And many
time
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times
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it is
life threatening
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life-threatening
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.
For example
, in
corona
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the corona
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epidemic, many
people
are get
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are getting
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sick, and in beginning, it
feel
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feels
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like
common
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a common
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cold
and
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apply
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some
people
try to
use
traditional
medicine
or home remedies not visit
doctor
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the doctor
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, and some of them get severally ill and lose their life. To
concluded
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conclude
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, there are many
disease
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diseases
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which many confuse
people
with other
disease
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diseases
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and they take
wrong
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the wrong
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medicine
or treatment and it
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may
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many
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may
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result
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results
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into
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in
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serious
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a serious
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problem
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problems
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, Other
medicines
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are
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good, but
people
should still consider
to visit
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visiting
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the actual
doctor
for
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check-up
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check
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a check
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up even they take
alternative
medicines
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alternative medicines
  • treatments
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • health problems
  • usual doctor
  • access
  • personalized approach
  • holistic well-being
  • lack of regulation
  • evidence-based research
  • proper medical treatment
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