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Some expert believe that it is a better for children to begin learning of foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this out weigh the disadvantages.

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Due to the advent of ,technology more people place a premium on learning new languages. Especially English. Some experts believe that
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 the best time for learning a foreign
language
 is in childhood, during primary
school
.
This
 essay will state some valid evidence for the same. To embark with, to advance a convincing theory I could deal with, their ready mind on the grounds that they will learn easily by just hearing that
language
. They will learn like their mother tongue.
For example
, it was written in a report that if children watch cartoons in another
language
 and hear that
language
 during the day, even if it is not their mother tongue, in long term, they will learn that
language
.
Additionally
, they can speak that
language
 fluently.
In addition
 to what I have just said, they have more free time to spend on that. They will be taught with games in
school
 and it is very enjoyable for them.
For instance
, when I was a teacher in kindergarten, I took different toys with me to make that class fun. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I could deal with its disadvantages.
Although
 it is much easier for children to learn at primary
school
 rather than in secondary
school
 or later
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 if the way they learn that
language
 is not suitable, they will hate learning and it is really hard for them to continue to study that
language
 later. To conclude, all in all, new methods of teaching have been established so that all children are interested in learning a foreign
language
.
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