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Many people think that TV has a positive impact on children’s creativity skills, while others believe that watching TV is damaging creative skills. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The maps illustrate the
centre
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 of Islip
town
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 today and its appearance after future developments. Overall, now the
town
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centre
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 is not developed enough. It provides citizens with some shops near the
road
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, housing, a
park
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 and a school.
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, in the
future
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 there will be more facilities like a car
park
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, a bus station and developed accommodation.
In
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 present days, the main
road
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 is surrounded by numerous shops and there is
a
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countryside to the north of the
town
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centre
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.
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, houses are located near a big
park
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 and a school. In the future, the
road
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 will be extended; it will surround the
centre
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 of Islip
town
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 and will have
dual
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 carriageway.
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 accommodation will be provided to citizens and the Main
road
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 will be replaced by a sidewalk. Some shops will be substituted by a shopping
centre
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 that will be situated between a bus station and a car
park
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.
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, the
park
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 will become smaller and the countryside will disappear.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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