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The maps illustrate the

centre

of Islip

town

today and its appearance after future developments. Overall, now the

town

centre

is not developed enough. It provides citizens with some shops near the

road

, housing, a

park

and a school.

However

, in the

future

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there will be more facilities like a car

park

, a bus station and developed accommodation.

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present days, the main

road

is surrounded by numerous shops and there is

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countryside to the north of the

town

centre

Besides

, houses are located near a big

park

and a school. In the future, the

road

will be extended; it will surround the

centre

of Islip

town

and will have

dual

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carriageway.

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accommodation will be provided to citizens and the Main

road

will be replaced by a sidewalk. Some shops will be substituted by a shopping

centre

that will be situated between a bus station and a car

park

However

, the

park

will become smaller and the countryside will disappear.

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4Word repetition
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162 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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