New technologies have changed the way children spend their free time. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this trend.

The maps illustrate Paradise
Island
, which was modernized over the time period. Overall, before the
renovation
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the
island
was not equipped enough. It had just several palm trees in the middle, other natural objects and some buildings.
However
, after the reconstruction, many new facilities were developed and some objects were removed. In the past, the only facilities on Paradise
island
were the Scientific Research Station, a small pier and a boat.
Moreover
, there were some plants like palm trees and a natural spring to the east. The beach was located to the north-west and rocks were situated to the north-east of the
island
. So far, various facilities were built on the
island
. The Scientific Research Station was demolished and replaced by a hotel complex with a swimming pool near it. The palm trees were chopped-down and an open restaurant connected with the hotel was constructed there. A café was built
next
to the spring and to the
south-east
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there is a BBQ area now.
Furthermore
, the
island
is surrounded by a cycle path and swimming near the beach is permitted today.
Besides
, the pier was extended as there is a cruise ship over there.
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