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There is a shortage of housing in many countries and this can lead to severe social Consequences. Only governments can solve this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that
the
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only the
state
 can provide solutions to the problems caused by housing shortages. I believe that
governments
 can be an important factor in solving housing-related issues but there are
also
 other bodies and institutions,
such
 as
charities
, which could help. The
first
 point which must be addressed is the extent to which
governments
 can help provide answers to the housing crisis. At the
state
level
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 there are many more resources to tackle issues
such
 as homelessness and poverty, two serious consequences of housing shortages. Local and national government bodies can provide financial support in the form of rent payments as well as temporary housing to those people who find themselves homeless or facing poverty. While
state
 intervention is useful, it is important to note that
governments
 are not the only institutions which are seen to help.
Charities
 and not-for-profit institutions are pivotal in their involvement in
this
 area because, at the national and governmental
level
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, bureaucracy can often restrict the speed and efficiency of providing the aforementioned solutions. In my country, we are still waiting for additional housing which was promised by our government over five years ago.
This
 is where
charities
 can assist as they are often the groups which help and support people if they are made homeless. They provide shelters and refuges which, while often only temporary, are a critical safety net for society and allow people to get back on their feet. In conclusion, housing shortages can very often lead to problems
such
 as homelessness and poverty.
Governments
 have the power to solve problems but they are often bureaucratic which is why we, as a society, very often rely on
charities
 to fill the gaps where the
state
 cannot intervene.
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