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The plans below show a public park when it tirst opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The maps indicate a public
park
 over the time period nearly100 years
has
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have
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 observed a considerable change. Overall, from 1920 to today the
park
 has been modernized completely.
Although
 the area of land did not alter, the area witnessed dramatically modification. To commence with,
Garden
Park
 is located on Arnold Avenue in Eldon Street. The figures illustrate that the
park
 had two original entrances whereas these days
third
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a third
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 entrance was built underground of a car
park
 and near the water feature. In
this
 way, the water feature has been replaced
instead
 of the glasshouse. After
this
, the rose
garden
 and pond for water plants north-east side of the
park
 were removed fully and superseded by a café and children's play area. During
this
 step, the rose
garden
 has been settled in the middle of
park
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the park
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instead
 of the fountain.
However
, the rose
garden
 remains on the north side of the
park
.
Finally
, the stage for musicians has been converted into an amphitheatre for concerts.
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