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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or storage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your opinion .

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There are many varied views of
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challenging situations. Some
people
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 are of opinion that they should accept every situation as it is which is coming their way while others think that they should change their position by doing something better. In my view,
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 should always try to make things better
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 of waiting for a miracle to take place. We will discuss both
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views in detail in the below paragraphs.
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 of all, In today's competitive world there are
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 of
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occurrences
 where
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 might not be happy with their current life.
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, there are many causes to it like an unsatisfactory job or sudden loss of money.
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, these
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 should take efforts to make their life a little easier rather than waiting for
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 to be better
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 day. For an instance,
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 should search for new jobs rather than sticking to an unsatisfactory job
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 incase of money
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 should always have
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foresight of
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 situations and start saving money to avoid difficulties in future.
On the other hand
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, some minds believe that it is better to stay where they are and wait for the right time for the situation to turn around. There are many examples that can be seen where some great minds have acted more calmly and had won over their bad phase.
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 national war where there is no immediate reaction.
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, It is important to wait for the right time before making any compulsive decision. To conclude, I believe there should be
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 approach in challenging scenarios where
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 should know when to act swiftly and when to wait for the right time to make their position better.
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 will help them to maintain a better life quality in any situation.
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