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Nowadays, people spend more and more time away from their families. Why is this? What effect will it have on themselves and their families?

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At the moment, there is an increasing trend for individuals to spend their
time
 distant from their
families
. Some people argue that the reasons for
this
 trend
is
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 very much acceptable and it will result
to
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 a
more
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wider perspective on the part of the person and a better
life
 for their
families
.
To begin
 with, it is undoubtedly a better option for one person to be working overseas,
thus
 keeping them away from their loved ones.
This
 is due to the reason that there is much better and greater opportunity for them abroad. Nurses,
for instance
,
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 for a great number of workers seeking
for
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jobs outside their
mother land
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, migrating to the US, UK or the Middle East.
This
 tendency would positively affect individuals as it will give a way to
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 perspective and an improvement in the
life
 of their
families
 financially.
In addition
, business
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 has been a popular trend as well
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 for those employed
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big companies.
This
 is a result of the growing demand for their employer to expand their businesses. In
this
 industry, nowadays, people spend their
time
 going
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 business trips.
This
 results
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 the individual to experience a new environment,
learn
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 a different culture and
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 accustomed to their way of
life
.
Furthermore
, vacation plays an important role for many to get away
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 their busy schedule, thereby getting away from their
families
. Some would opt to travel alone. More importantly, these people choose to go away and take a
time
 to reflect on their
life
.
For example
, celebrities
,
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 would usually spend their precious
time
 going
for
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 holidays and exploring different countries. In
such
 ways, the experience would let them reset their mindset and when they
finally
 go home, they can share their experience
to
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 their
families
. In summary, an individual will greatly benefit from being away from their
families
. It will ultimately give them a new perspective and builds their family finances.
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