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Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of most people 's lives . Others think that adult life brings more happiness , in spite of greater responsibilities . Discuss both these views and give your opinion .

#people #years #times #lives #adult #life #happiness #spite #responsibilities
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opinion
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 about
happiest
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 moment in their
life
. While many
people
 believe that they were happy when they are adolescence ,
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other believe that adulthood was more enjoyable than their teenage. In my
opinion
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 the happiest moment of a person's
life
 varies from time to time. In
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 we will discuss
the
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both views and give our
opinion
.
To begin
with
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 each stage of
life
 has its own sorrows and joys. Many
people
 remember their teenage years with utmost importance as they enjoyed their school or college days . As friendships are the prime during those years, many of us
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 experienced joyful moments.
For Instance
, sports events, and college parties were great occasions to get together and have fun.
Also
 teenage have much fewer
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responsibilities
responsibilites
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responsibilities
 than adults.
On the other hand
, adulthood offers several positive and happy moments. Most
of
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the adults fondly remember their cherished moments
such
getting
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 their
first
 job or house, marriage day celebration,
and
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birth of
child
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a child
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 and so on. As
the
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people
age
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 they develop qualities
such
maturity
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 and understanding. These factors can bring a sense of stability which contributes
long term
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 happiness in many
people
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 lives. In conclusion, teenage and
adulthood
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life
 have their shares of up and down. While lack of
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responsibilities
responsibility
responsibilites
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responsibilities
 during
teenage
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make
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makes
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life
 more joyous, while
realization
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the realization
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 of one's dream
make
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makes
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 adult
life
 more responsible. In my
opinion
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 it is up to each
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individual
indvidual
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individual
 to decide which period was the happiest in their
life
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adolescence
  • fulfillment
  • responsibilities
  • exploration
  • long-term goals
  • sense of stability
  • carefree
  • contentment
  • well-being
  • life stage
  • unique opportunities
  • deep satisfaction
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