Some people thinks that the most important thing about being rich is it gives a person the opportunity to help other people. Do you agree or disagree.
An average person thinks that assisting people is one of the most valuable
thing
about being wealthy. Change to a plural noun
things
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essay agrees with Linking Words
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on
how opportunities to help people have been achieved by richness.
In most communities, there are Change preposition
of
lot
of villagers that Correct article usage
a lot
needs
sponsorship for their education. Change the verb form
need
This
is designed to relieve poor parents. Literacy is important in the life of human beings, and some are struggling to obtain it, but with the assistance of some rich men in the community scholarships and Linking Words
grant
can be made available up to Fix the agreement mistake
grants
tertiary
educational level, and Correct article usage
the tertiary
this
will enable them Linking Words
achieve
their dreams and ambitions. Recently in Ondo Add the particle
to achieve
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a popular musician create a scholarship scheme for pupils graduating from randomly selected primary schools to cater for their secondary and tertiary Add a comma
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institution
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institutions
uniform
.
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uniforms
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periodic
job Add an article
the periodic
a periodic
search
. Fix the agreement mistake
searches
This
helps graduates to earn a good living. Convocated students from Universities, Polytechnics and Colleges of education roam the streets and engage in odd jobs not befitting of their status due to insufficient employment, lack of recommendation or experience. Having an influential person with great connections Linking Words
pave
Correct subject-verb agreement
paves
way
to Add an article
the way
get
stable Wrong verb form
getting
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employment
employments
with Correct your spelling
employment
good
salary, health insurance and other benefits that are basic to life, Add an article
a good
this
in Linking Words
turns
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turn
reduce
unemployment in Correct subject-verb agreement
reduces
the
society and crime. A practical example after I finished school, was my Correct article usage
apply
first
offer letter of employment that was sent to me from my Uncle who is a friend Linking Words
to
the Medical Director of a Teaching Hospital I applied to, I got the job through his influence and it gave me all the experience I have.
In conclusion, there is Change preposition
of
a clear evidence
to support that money and Remove the article
clear evidence
a piece of clear evidence
a shred of clear evidence
influence
of somebody gives them Correct article usage
the influence
opportunity
to put a smile on the face of people.Add an article
the opportunity
an opportunity
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