Some people thinks that the most important thing about being rich is it gives a person the opportunity to help other people. Do you agree or disagree.

An average person thinks that assisting people is one of the most valuable

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about being wealthy.

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how opportunities to help people have been achieved by richness. In most communities, there are

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of villagers that

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sponsorship for their education.

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is designed to relieve poor parents. Literacy is important in the life of human beings, and some are struggling to obtain it, but with the assistance of some rich men in the community scholarships and

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can be made available up to

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educational level, and

this

will enable them

achieve

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their dreams and ambitions. Recently in Ondo

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a popular musician create a scholarship scheme for pupils graduating from randomly selected primary schools to cater for their secondary and tertiary

institution

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, including tuition fees, study materials and

uniform

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.

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job

search

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.

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helps graduates to earn a good living. Convocated students from Universities, Polytechnics and Colleges of education roam the streets and engage in odd jobs not befitting of their status due to insufficient employment, lack of recommendation or experience. Having an influential person with great connections

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to

get

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stable

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employment

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employments

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employment

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with

good

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salary, health insurance and other benefits that are basic to life,

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in

turns

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reduce

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unemployment in

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society and crime. A practical example after I finished school, was my

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offer letter of employment that was sent to me from my Uncle who is a friend

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the Medical Director of a Teaching Hospital I applied to, I got the job through his influence and it gave me all the experience I have. In conclusion, there is

a clear evidence

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to support that money and

influence

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of somebody gives them

opportunity

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the opportunity

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to put a smile on the face of people.