Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?
Healthy nutrition in today's Society is a huge topic. The amount of
sugar
in multiple manufactured food and drink
products are
an often discussed problem. It's scientifically proven that it can cause several health issues Correct subject-verb agreement
is
such
as diabetes, high blood pressure or heart problems. Some people think that the price of sugary products should be raised so that customers are encouraged to eat and drink
less sugar
. I don't agree and believe that there are better ways to do so. An alternative way to eat or drink
less sugar
is using sweeteners. A good example of reducing the amount of the
sweet sin one consumes is drinking Correct article usage
apply
sugar
-free soft drinks instead
of the original variant. You can also
use a variety of sweeteners at home for instance
in your yoghurt or the morning coffee. A problem is that some people have intolerances to artificial sweeteners but these are less harmful than the diseases real sugar
can cause. Raising the price for goods that contain high levels of sugar
will not make people consuming
it is less Wrong verb form
consume
cause
even the most common food Correct your spelling
because
such
as bread or pasta is made with it. If customers are used to have
Change the verb form
having
e.g
a specific sweet Correct your spelling
e.g.
drink
they like it's very unlikely that they skip drinking it just because the price goes up. Family doctors should be involved by offering regular body checkups and information about the most common diseases caused by our way of life. In conclusion, I believe that every individual should decide what and how much to eat or drink
on its own. The important thing to know is how to still maintain a well-balanced nourishment. It's better to raise awareness about alternative substitutes as well as
more advertising and education about a healthier way to enjoy food or drinks.Submitted by s.jeckel on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite