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Some people think that only electric cars should be allowed on the roads by 2040. Do you agree?

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The usage of electric vehicles is constantly rising these days. A few people have the opinion that by the year
2040
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2040,
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 no regular
cars
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 should be driving on the roads anymore. I partly agree because in my
opinion
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opinion,
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 it makes sense to ban them from the downtown areas but not from roads in general.
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, of
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 a huge positive factor of a development like
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 would be the effect on our environment. The reduction of the pollution caused by regular gas or diesel
cars
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 would be enormous. Especially for big cities like Tokyo where the air is so highly polluted that people need to wear masks to avoid inhaling the smog.
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 why prohibiting non-electric automobiles in city
centers
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 is a relatable goal for the future. But where I see an issue is to ban regular
cars
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 from every other street. Electric
cars
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 are known for their minimal range what is ultimately leading to the fact that people need to charge them around every 350
kilometers
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.
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, it will take up to one hour or more to recharge.
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 might not be a problem in the city where you can leave your car
on
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 a special charging station
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 you go shopping. But it will be an unpleasant experience when you are heading a road trip that will take 1000
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. Developing
the
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 network of charging stations not only in cities but
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 in rural areas might solve
this
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 issue.
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 it is questionable if
this
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 is possible until 2040. In conclusion, I believe that banning regular
cars
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 from the cities is useful
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 the environmental aspect. But despite
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fact,
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 a lot of development must happen for electric vehicles and the surrounding network to make it a plausible goal for the roads in general in the near future.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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